Rita Muliawati (N1A514063)

Assalamualaikum Wr. Wb

               In this occasion, I am going to give a feedback to my friend Wa Ode Arniyanti from her writing in her blog. Of course is not mean if I was perfect in my writing, but I just want to give my opinion to her writing, and I hope it can help in the next writing process.  Well, this is the text that my friend posted:

86

I would like to discuss about one reality show on NET.TV is "86". I was discussing this because I am very interested in how the police perform their duties in the field daily. This show about routine police forces. This event began at 10 pm each day at NET.TV . In the reality show "86" cops are working hard to do its job, among others, regulate traffic, to catch drug dealers, arrest perpetrators of gambling, illegal racing, etc. First watch the event I am very proud as a citizen of Indonesia when I saw the police do its job properly and correctly.              

This event has many benefits. We can take a lesson, one of them when we as road users we should have to obey the rules and we can know the risks if we do not obey these rules. In this event not only road users get a lesson but the police officers also got the knowledge of what he had to do as a police officer. Not only useful but also fun events, this event was very exciting when I saw the police do its job like to pursue the perpetrators fled and guess these actors. This event is good because many offenders are arrested by the police, although many cases of crime in Indonesia, at least thanks to this show crime in Indonesia reduced little by little.             

But I think the show is not the same as what I witnessed in my area. Many police that their job is not true and correct, such as the one when the police arrested a motorist who does not have the driver's license or who does not use a helmet, motorists freed when police received money from the rider and there is also a traffic violators freed because of a personal relationship with the police or some sort of family. Not only that, even the police cooperate with drug dealers to smoothed and the police receive a reward of what he did.  

Although the reality show "86" this directly, I still have doubts about this event. I know this show of cooperation between the police and NET.TV. but I think this is just a crap police force in order to change the image of the police to the public, so that citizens consider the police did a good job, responsible, etc. But I worry about the police do a good job and was just in front of the camera. I hope the reality show “86” continues and I hope the police perform their duties with sincerity in this event, not because just in front of the camera.

These are the mistakes that I think the writer made:

I would like to discuss about one reality show on NET.TV is "86". 

It needs preposition ‘of ’, it better if she say: I would like to discuss about one of reality show on Net TV, it is ‘86’.

I was discussing this because I am very interested in…

We have to consider the grammar, it is not appropriate if we use past continuous but it should be present continuous:  I am discussing this because…..

This show about routine police forces.

When I check this sentence in the application of Microsoft Word, it needs revising again. Just for information, I often hear force never collocated with police, it has collocation with army.

First watch the event I am very proud….

I think this is an unnatural sentence, it is common way to write: when the first time I watched the program……

This event has many benefits. (Paragraph 2)

But I think the show is not the same as what I witnessed in my area. (Paragraph 3)

Although the reality show "86" this directly, (paragraph 2)

The last, I think the writer has to give a special attention toward the main idea. If we want to make a new paragraph we also have to consider the main idea first. In my opinion what the writer was discuss in each her paragraph it was good. I can got it, but the main sentence is unclear.

Ok. That’s all that I want to say, I hope it can give the benefit. I am sorry if there mistake on my opinion. Thank you.  Wassalamualaikum wr. wb

RITA MULIAWATI Reg. No (N1A514063)

My virtual access in my University

         Today I am going to tell you about my virtual access as long as I studied in Halu Oleo University.  I still remember when I was   in first semester, if there are many my homeworks or something that I wanted to download, my friends and I often go to  the place that have hot-spot or Wi-Fi  like at my friend's rental house, Telkom or Warnet. But now in semester IV, except warnet we never go there again. It is because in around my college now there are many places to get free access  by Wi-Fi. 

ELTC is one of the places that not strange for my friends and I to visit. It is because we often studied at this place. I think this is the good place for access network but if there are many people at there, the connection will be bad. As I knew there is a particular time where this place is deserted by  student. It is on Saturday and of course Sunday. I ever go there on Saturday and it was true. There are just some of peoples at there and the connection are very fast.  

Library is also a good place for access inetwork in Halu Oleo. Sometimes if I studied in my faculty (humanities) before go to home my friends and I often go to library for download something.  I like this place because besides internet access was available, the place for striking my hand phone or NB was also available. So I am not afraid if my hand phone is low bat. In my opinion all the place to get free for access internet is same, if there are many people use that the connection, it will be slow.  It is also happened in library. But I think if I go there in the afternoon the connection is good.

The others good place for access internet are in around auditorium and rectorate building. I rarely go in this place but I saw many people go there to access free network. I ever try and I think this place is good, because there are many chairs or gazebo are available. So I can enjoy but I think the connection is not enough good. It is because always many people at there. Recently, there is my Creative Writing class in rectorate. I like to study in rectorate, because I think the the connection in here is  the best.

That is all about my virtual access in my college. I hope in the future it can be better and all the students of my university can get many benefit from the virtual access that was available.

mynewenglishtyle 

Talking About TV Show Program : Ini Talkshow on Net TV

Tuesday,  March 22, 2016

            In this time, I want to share my opinion about one of the TV show programs that be the in-thing and of course you have done familiar about that. Recently, I was watching “Ini Talkshow” program on Net TV. This is the talk show program that handle by Sule as host, Andre Taulani as consultant-host, and the other characters as the family of host like Yurike, Maya septa,  saswi, Yujeng, H. Bolot, Patro and Nunung. All of these characters have the particular roles. ‘Ini Talkshow” program present every Monday-Friday at 8-10 p.m.

            I think “Ini Talkshow” is the program that differs from most of talk show program in another TV. When I am watching last time, the guests are Tiwi, Jessika Iskandar, and Noumi. They are not my idols, but I still wanted to watch because I like this program. I felt so interesting and entertaining when I was watching this program. Perhaps it was because Sule and the others is comedian. So they can make the atmosphere always be happy. It is the one thing that I cannot get in the others talk show TV program.

            There many things that make “ Ini Talk show” are interesting. Besides the host, I think the surprise that would give to guest is also interesting for waited. It is a gift can be a noun or someone. As I know, all of the surprise can make the guests was happy. The role of Yujeng as the spectator coordinator and also the umpire are the good things. Who is he, when they are talking something uncomplimentary they got punishment to pay a fine five thousand rupiah to Yujeng. It is extremely good, considering that this is the live program which means we did not know what peoples in this program are wanted to say.

            All of the things have a good and bad, there is nobody perfect in this word. In my opinion it is a little hard to say what the bad of this program is. I just think if there a TV program can make me happy is enough to say that is the good program and I do not want to think anymore.  But if it is a something that I have to say, maybe something that still bad from this program is I did not like with some of characters that involve in this program. As I know, most of talk show program just present Host, Co-Host and the guests, but in this program there are many characters that I think their roles are not really important. They like to waste the time for make a comedy. So, it is make me thought if it is like comedy program not talk show because there are many portion for comedy rather than discuss about the topic. But honestly it can make me enjoy when I was watching this program.

            In my opinion although “ini Talkshow” has some of flaws, but as a whole it was interesting program to watch by anyone. We were  not just got information from the topic but also we would comfort with the comedy by Sule and friends. This program like created a new variation of talk show in Indonesia. So, I recommend you to watch this program.